Archive for December, 2004

SEO Copywriting Makeover: Good Rankings but No Sales <br> (Part 1 of 2)

Tuesday, December 28th, 2004

by Karon Thackston © 2004, All Rights Reserved
http://www.copywritingcourse.com/keyword

It’s been a myth for as long as the Internet has been in existence. Get good rankings and your site will be successful. I hate to be the bearer of bad news, but that has never been the case. What you get when you achieve good search engine rankings is a lot of traffic. That *can* be a wonderful thing, but it by no means guarantees even one sale.

You see, search engine rankings are not responsible for making sales. They are responsible for getting visitors to click to your site. If you (or your search engine optimizer) have done your job, you’ll have descriptions in your search returns (or PPC ads) that bring in qualified visitors. But still. even with qualified visitors, the engines are not in a position to make sales at your site. That’s the job your copy and usability elements handle.

Top Security, Inc. faced this problem. They had good search engine rankings. They were listed on the first page of most of the major engines. They had the traffic. Sales, however, were not where they wanted them to be. What was the cause? One look told me the copy was the culprit. (Take a look at the original copy here: http://www.copywritingcourse.com/topsecurity-original.pdf.)

The Problems

Top Security had a tough sale by anybody’s standards. They sold home security systems and maintenance services. (Something hardly anybody likes to talk about until after something happens, and it’s virtually too late.) In order to get someone to move on products/services like home security, insurance, and the like, you really must develop a sense of trust and urgency.

When I first viewed the Top Security, Inc. home page, it was obvious that they knew what they needed to do. They had made a few attempts on the page in the form of graphics and MP3 files to accomplish those two goals. For example, they posted a current Threat Advisory graphic from the Department of Homeland Security (establishing urgency). There was also an MP3 that played kindergarten children singing “God Bless America” (plays toward patriotism and trust). Lastly, the headline was designed to try to build a sense of longevity. However, none of these was reflected in the copy. The most important part of the page was overlooked.

In order to turn the home page around, the salesman of the site (a.k.a. the words) needed to speak to the visitors in their own language. It needed to show them what can happen to those who have no security system and then offer a way to prevent those tragedies. The copy had to give assurances and build trust while at the same time helping visitors to stop procrastinating and make a move now.

While current rankings were good, there was still room for improvement. For search engine purposes, the copy needed to offer better support for the chosen keyphrases. There were virtually no keyphrases in the original body copy and that had to be changed.

The Solutions

The biggest part of the solution for Top Security was to develop copy for the home page. period. The copy on the original site was minimal, was company-focused instead of customer-focused, and needed to do a better job of addressing the needs of the site visitors and search engines.

The new copy had to set a tone of trust and community since Top Security dealt only with local Florida residents. In fact, I pulled out all the benefits small, local companies can offer their customers in order to play up Top Security in the new copy.

At the same time, I wanted to weave the client’s keyphrases into the text without making them stand out. The goal was to have a home page that read as naturally as possible to humans while giving the spiders and bots what they needed in order to boost Top Security’s rankings.

In Part 2 of this article, I’ll show you how I implemented the changes in order to improve conversions and what the results were.


Karon Thackston is a veteran copywriting pro who specializes in SEO copy. If your copy isn’t getting results, let Karon teach you how to write SEO copy that impresses the engines and your visitors at http://www.copywritingcourse.com. Be sure to check out Karon’s latest ebook “How To Increase Keyword Saturation (Without Destroying the Flow of Your Copy)” at http://www.copywritingcourse.com/keyword.Just because you have good search engine rankings does not mean you’ll
automatically get lots of sales. Follow the process of creating a page
that ranks high and converts visitors to buyers.



"Super Verbs" Really Move Your Copy

Wednesday, December 8th, 2004

by Karon Thackston © 2004
http://www.learn-copywriting.com

Run or hustle? Eat or devour? Move or scurry? You can boost the power of your copy by boosting the quality of verbs you use.

Verbs show action, and the way you describe that action can have a dramatic bearing on your readers. Why would you want to fill your copy with complacent words when you can conjure emotions and visual imagery in the hearts and minds of your readers? Sure, run and hustle both indicate that someone is moving fast.

But run is a dull, ordinary verb while hustle evokes definite images in your reader’s mind.

Hadn’t really thought about it? You should! You can choose commonplace verbs like talk, make, and like, or you can electrify your copy instead with verbs like chatter, discover, and adore.

Look at these examples to see what I mean:

Before

Down Comforters Let You Get WarmWhen it’s cold outside, get into bed and warm up with our genuine goose down comforters. There’s no reason to be cold when you can heat things up instead!

 

After

Down Comforters Let You SnuggleWhen it’s cold outside, leap into bed and burrow down with our genuine goose down comforters. There’s no reason to shiver when you can snuggle instead!

 

See the difference? The latter paints a more vivid picture of the comforter than the former.

Review this one.

Before

Whether you’re doing aerobics, Pilates, or any other workout, Ziox sneakers will give you the support you need. Specifically made for indoor low- and high-impact exercise, Ziox is created to keep you on the path to meeting your fitness goals.

 

After

Whether you’re performing an aerobic, Pilates, or other workout, Ziox sneakers will offer you the support you need. Specifically engineered for indoor low- and high-impact exercise, Ziox is designed to keep you on the path to accomplishing your fitness goals.

 

What’s the difference? Why are the “afters” so much more powerful than the “befores”? Because compelling verbs were used.

Verbs bring the action to your copy. They give the reader (or at least they should give the reader) something to envision. You need Super Verbs to entice your readers. For example, instead of just get into bed, we say, leap into bed. Instead of being cold and heat things up we say, shivering and snuggle.

When you read that, you begin to envision what action is taking place in a very specific way.

Where do you find these Super Verbs? Everywhere you look!

Here’s a short list. You can also visit free sites like http://www.thesaurus.com for more.

Verbs vs. Super Verbs

  • Accent - emphasize, underscore
  • Break - smash, crush, demolish
  • Eat - consume, devour, feast
  • Forgive - pardon, excuse, overlook
  • Hate - detest, loathe, despise
  • Imagine - envision, conjure, conceptualize
  • Improve - enhance, refine, perfect
  • Jump - leap, lunge, bound
  • Learn - discover, grasp, comprehend
  • Like - admire, adore, cherish, delight in
  • Make - create, engineer, design
  • Promise - vow, swear
  • Reveal - manifest, unveil, disclose

Take some time to go beyond the ordinary. Find a few Super Verbs to use in your copy in order to boost excitement and interest in the products/services you write about. That added attention, which Super Verbs bring, can easily correlate to additional sales.

Karon Thackston is a professional copywriter with over 20 years of success. If you’re tired of endlessly searching the ‘Net in hopes of finding the latest copywriting techniques. If you need an up-to-date directory filled with the best ways to learn copywriting then visit Karon’s directory at Learn Copywriting today for the widest collection of the most popular copywriting resources available.Run or hustle? Eat or devour? Move or scurry? You can boost the power
of your copy by boosting the quality of verbs you use.